This is Mrs Paterson writing describing Mr Twit
As I look at Mr Twit I shudder in dis-belief at the sight I
see. His shoulders slump forward arching
his back like a bow. His head slinks
into his shoulders and his clothes hang disorderly from his frame. Awkward and uneasy!
His beady brown eyes
peer out beneath the tufts of dark hair that branch out in all directions like
a tree. His hairy face, sprouts tuffs from
his nostrils and ear holes like bristles on a toothbrush. The hairy jungle grabs crumbs as they fall from
his mouth. If you look close and peer
deep into his forest of bristles, you will know doubt see a piece of maggoty mouldy
cheese or old cornflake. The disgusting nutriments grab these wispy rods
clinging on for dear life.
A nasty mean old man that plays tricks on his wife that play
tricks with her mind. Watch out for Mr Twit.
Watch out for tricks he plays. Mr Twit deserves all he gets for being a nasty
mean old man. You have been warned!
To be successful in our writing it should include a variety of language features including
- Personification
- alliteration
- similes
- metaphors
- adjectives
- alliterations
- short sentences for impact
See if you can find any of these in Mrs Patersons writing.
Watch out for some exciting language on the haggard Mrs Twit
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