This is Mrs Paterson writing describing Mr Twit
As I look at Mr Twit I shudder in dis-belief at the sight I see. His shoulders slump forward arching his back like a bow. His head slinks into his shoulders and his clothes hang disorderly from his frame. Awkward and uneasy!
His beady brown eyes peer out beneath the tufts of dark hair that branch out in all directions like a tree. His hairy face, sprouts tuffs from his nostrils and ear holes like bristles on a toothbrush. The hairy jungle grabs crumbs as they fall from his mouth. If you look close and peer deep into his forest of bristles, you will know doubt see a piece of maggoty mouldy cheese or old cornflake. The disgusting nutriments grab these wispy rods clinging on for dear life.
A nasty mean old man that plays tricks on his wife that play tricks with her mind. Watch out for Mr Twit. Watch out for tricks he plays. Mr Twit deserves all he gets for being a nasty mean old man. You have been warned!
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