Holiday writing describing the weather

Holiday weather

Walt: Describe the weather using a range of language features

To be successful my writing needs

• onomatopoeia
• similes
• metaphors
• personification
• adjectives
• paragraphs

As the wind howls in the distance, rain pelts down from the sky like bullets from a gun.  I hear pitter patter on the windows as the rain taps it's fingers against the glass.  Windows rattle from the shear force of the gale winds and washing is thrown furiously around on the line.   Swish, swoosh, I can see branches swaying frantically as the wind pushes them from side to side.  Swimming pool puddles form everywhere, creating a haven for pukekos and ducks to play.  Scared birds hibernate and shelter in the deep forest of trees, keeping themselves warm and safe.  Dead leaves dance gracefully in the air as they are shaken off from the brittle trees.  

They lie in a pile on the ground, decomposing and becoming rich nutrients for the soil below.

Slowly, the sun peeks its head through the ashen clouds.  Brave birds appear from their nests

and animals from their burrows.  Warmth fills the air finally allowing animals and washing to

dry.  Children joyously play in puddles and splash each other excitedly.  Smiles all round

as warmth fills the air.

Make it into a poem by rearranging

Holiday Weather

 As the wind howls in the distance,

rain pelts down from the sky like bullets from a gun.

 I hear pitter patter on the windows

the rain taps it's fingers against the glass.  

Windows rattle from the shear force of the gale winds

washing is thrown furiously around on the line.   

Swish, swoosh, I can see branches swaying frantically

as the wind pushes them from side to side.  

Swimming pool puddles form everywhere,

creating a haven for pukekos and ducks to play.  

Scared birds hibernate and shelter in the deep forest of trees,

keeping themselves warm and safe.  

Dead leaves dance gracefully in the air as they are shaken off from the brittle trees.  

They lie in a pile on the ground,

decomposing and becoming rich nutrients for the soil below.