Walt: describe the hot air
balloon.
Children gasped as the fiery
dragon spat spurts of flame into thin air. A tug of the lever and the agonising heat touched
my skin leaving an uncomfortable warmth.
Children backed away slowly, cowering from the sound that
pierced our ears.
Clambering in the creaky wicker basket
with a sense of pride, Almas created a flamboyant flame that dispersed
into the atmosphere.
The intense colour lit up the bleak sky like fireworks, and the heat lay
a blanket of warmth over the children. i stared in awe!
In the distance a striped blanket
floated gently on the ground, rolling like waves in the ocean. Excitable chatter and coos filled the air
as the envelope slowly filled its pillow insides with the blistering heat. Gradually rising from the ground, the
light bulb silhouette bounced in the air like a kangaroo fleeing from its
predator. Lifting its basket from the
desolate ground, ropes wrapped their arms around the trees preventing the wicker
from climbing high into the coffee colored clouds. Satisfied
and informed. I made my way back to
class and the envelope slumped to the ground. Lifeless!
Success Criteria (My writing to be successful should include these language features
Adjectives, agonising, creaky, flamboyant, desolate
Alliteration (repeating sounds/letters) e.g climbing into coffee coloured clouds, flamboyant flame
Similes (compare using like or as) rolling like waves in the ocean,
Metaphors (compare without using like or as) pillow insides
Personification (adding a human characteristic to a non-human object) warmth lay a blanket, sound that pierced our ears
Short sentences for impact Lifeless, I stared in awe!
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